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  1. chiptaker31 chiptaker31 is offline

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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 6:57am)

    Me and my buddy wrote a song, and he rapped it and another buddy sings on it. It is a song about Christ so if you don't believe in God that is fine. Any feedback on the flow, beat, lyrics, any feedback you have would be appreciated. I have friends who don't believe in God and they relate to the song, Anything is appreciated so I ask you to just take a listen. If not thats fine. (would prefer this not to turn into a debate thread about wether there is a God or not but that is outta my control) I come to OT cause you guys are the harshest critics i know. Don't hold anything back. Anything is appreciated

    Here is the link. http://www.youtube.com/user/givinproductions

    Really appreciate it to anyone who listens to it!! Subscribe if you like it. Video embedded in post
    Edited By: chiptaker31 Nov 1st, 2011 at 08:10 AM
  2. m0ss m0ss is offline

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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 7:09am) in reply to chiptaker31

    Not really my cup of tea(religion or rap). But it's not terrible, I made it about 2:30 before turning it off.
  3. clwhat clwhat is offline

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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 7:12am) in reply to m0ss

    i liked it.
  4. whoMikeB whoMikeB is online now

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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 7:14am) in reply to clwhat

    Pretty solid. I liked some parts a lot and some not so much, but overall I liked it.
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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 7:21am) in reply to whoMikeB

     
    Originally Posted by m0ss View Post

    Not really my cup of tea(religion or rap). But it's not terrible, I made it about 2:30 before turning it off.


     
    Originally Posted by clwhat View Post

    i liked it.


     
    Originally Posted by whoMikeB View Post

    Pretty solid. I liked some parts a lot and some not so much, but overall I liked it.


    Thanks guys. Really appreciate ya taking time to listen to it!
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  6. Hank H1LL Hank H1LL is offline

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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 7:26am) in reply to chiptaker31

    I didn't listen to it.
  7. chiptaker31 chiptaker31 is offline

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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 8:00am) in reply to Hank H1LL

     
    Originally Posted by Hank H1LL View Post

    I didn't listen to it.

    lol appreciate you taking the time to comment then lol

    come on guys give it a watch, want some of that OT criticism
    Edited By: chiptaker31 Nov 1st, 2011 at 07:59 AM
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  8. ScottBrewr99 ScottBrewr99 is online now

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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 8:04am) in reply to chiptaker31

    i like christian rap, its very uplifting. Not like those real musicians with their complicated shoes.
  9. TMLMS13 TMLMS13 is offline

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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 8:05am) in reply to Hank H1LL

    was going to listen until I saw rap and christ in same sentence, then see its not embedded

    edit listened to 6 seconds, sounded fine in terms of music, simply wont comment on lyrics/rapping ability
    Edited By: TMLMS13 Nov 1st, 2011 at 08:07 AM
  10. chiptaker31 chiptaker31 is offline

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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 8:06am) in reply to ScottBrewr99

    hmmmm not so sure you are being serious

    fair enough. don't know how to embed. sorry
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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 8:09am) in reply to chiptaker31

     
    Originally Posted by chiptaker31 View Post

    don't know how to embed. sorry

  12. chiptaker31 chiptaker31 is offline

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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 8:19am) in reply to TMLMS13

     
    Originally Posted by TMLMS13 View Post

    was going to listen until I saw rap and christ in same sentence, then see its not embedded

    edit listened to 6 seconds, sounded fine in terms of music, simply wont comment on lyrics/rapping ability


    welp thanks for that 6 secs my friend

     
    Originally Posted by clwhat View Post


    sweeet man!! thanks

    im off to bed, hope to see more views in the morning!
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  13. TMLMS13 TMLMS13 is offline

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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 8:34am) in reply to chiptaker31

     
    Originally Posted by chiptaker31 View Post

    welp thanks for that 6 secs my friend

    im not commenting because I have way too much bias against the topic
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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 8:51am) in reply to TMLMS13

    nigga plz
     
  15. chiptaker31 chiptaker31 is offline

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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 8:52am) in reply to TMLMS13

    i understand TM
    Edited By: chiptaker31 Nov 1st, 2011 at 08:52 AM
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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 9:38am) in reply to chiptaker31

    The "Casio Clap" throughout the song could be toned down or replaced/mixed up, not bad overall. With that said:

    Edited By: skercrazy Nov 1st, 2011 at 09:40 AM
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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 1:53pm) in reply to skercrazy

    It sounds more "complete" than pgh's in terms of production value, but that doesn't really take much and I don't like it at all. The "flow" sounds whiny, the delivery is shit, the music is simultaneously boring and annoying, and I won't comment on the lyrics because a Christian rap song is about as likely to have decent lyrics as slugger is to give a fuck what the thread is about (slugger, please don't change).

    To be fair, I didn't really like pgh's either, but I didn't feel like typing out a long response at the time so I responded honestly letting him know which version I preferred over the other. But now that he's posting bits of new lyrics all over the place and we have these other fucking "up and coming" rappers cropping up again, I think I should just go ahead and put this out there: if you are thinking about starting one of these threads, don't. Please don't. You suck at rap. You might be halfway decent, but really nobody but your friends really want to hear that halfway decent shit. Please commence to posting your talent in the Not Quite Threadworthy thread.

    No offense
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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 5:13pm) in reply to wes_mc

    Made it 1:30. Man that's a whiny song with way too much of that Casio clap.
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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 6:25pm) in reply to ccm

    thanks for the comments. And if you don't mind, what you mean by whiny. You talking bout the lyrics or the sound??

    oh and it doesn't matter if the rap sucks. as long as people listen and if one person gets our message than its all worth it. I'm gonna keep posting these threads for our songs lol. Harsh criticism is how you get better at stuff you do

    Again i really appreciate everyone who took the time to listen and comment!!
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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 6:27pm) in reply to chiptaker31

    in before thread derails into a religious debate
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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 6:49pm) in reply to kdunlapmo

     
    Originally Posted by kdunlapmo View Post

    in before thread derails into a religious debate


    i hope not! but if you listened to it, thanks man!
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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 6:56pm) in reply to kdunlapmo

     
    Originally Posted by kdunlapmo View Post

    in before thread derails into a religious debate

    thats why i decided to not post my opinion
    Edited By: TMLMS13 Nov 1st, 2011 at 06:56 PM
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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 7:06pm) in reply to TMLMS13

  24. chiptaker31 chiptaker31 is offline

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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 7:08pm) in reply to Hank H1LL

    anybody in here like Lupe Fiasco?
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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 7:17pm) in reply to chiptaker31

    lold pretty hard. doubt this is what you are going for but atleast you got that going for you
     
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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 7:19pm) in reply to stackinsideways

    thanks for the comment my friend
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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 7:21pm) in reply to chiptaker31

    Ok, but only because you asked for real criticism, otherwise I would have withheld my opinion.

    Lyrics are terribad, rapping is whiny, chorus is monotonous, and the little high-pitched synth sounds and clapping are super cheesy sounding.

    LOLRELIGION.

    On the positive side, I think you and your friends do have some potential, and the production isn't completely awful.
  28. Glo4m Glo4m is offline Confess to me

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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 7:25pm) in reply to Rocket Surgeon

    I don't think it was ever in God's plan for you to be a rapper, just saying.
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    Nov 1st, 2011 (11/1/2011 7:28pm) in reply to Glo4m

    Probably not the best to offer an opinion, because I am not a fan of rap, but I liked the lyrics and appreciate what you're trying to do. Best wishes :)
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    Nov 2nd, 2011 (11/2/2011 8:57am) in reply to Glo4m

    not trying to be a rapper. Just having fun and making music about what i know.

     
    Originally Posted by ECUgirl View Post

    Probably not the best to offer an opinion, because I am not a fan of rap, but I liked the lyrics and appreciate what you're trying to do. Best wishes :)


    Thanks ECUgirl means a lot! :)


    And thanks to anyone else who took the time to listen
    Edited By: chiptaker31 Nov 2nd, 2011 at 08:57 AM
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