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Wrote another song

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  1. TigerWho TigerWho is offline

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    Feb 1st, 2011 (2/1/2011 12:43am)

    About me and my new lady. Like it/Hate it I'll take any criticism... chorus is in bold and obv needs work

    Thinking back now 'bout the first time I met you
    Wondering how, how I'm ever gonna get you
    to ever remember, remember my name
    Well Summer passed and Winter came
    and I finally got the courage to hop on a plane
    Headed down to see you for a while

    All these new emotions have never felt so true
    I'd like to live forever,
    But not a day without you

    Things started out slow,
    But picked up fast
    And all these new emotions
    Have me thinking of the past
    I don't know how I lived without you smile

    Looking at your pictures got me thinking of that smile
    Such a beautiful sight
    That I haven't seen in a while
    If said I didn't love you,
    It's be nothing but denial

    All these new emotions have never felt so true
    I'd like to live forever,
    But not a day without you

    Now that I've met you
    No matter how bad a day
    Dreaming of your smile
    Makes it all go away
    And the sound of your voice brings an instant smile
    This love is new, hope it last for a while

    All these new emotions have never felt so true
    I'd like to live forever,
    But not a day without you

    still a work in progress

    and for guitar players the chords are

    0 2 0 0
    0 4 0 2
    7 4 0 2
    6 2 2 1
    5 2 3 0
    0 2 0 0
    Edited By: TigerWho Feb 1st, 2011 at 12:50 AM
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    Feb 1st, 2011 (2/1/2011 12:49am) in reply to TigerWho

    C
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    Feb 1st, 2011 (2/1/2011 12:51am) in reply to budo09

     
    Originally Posted by budo09 View Post

    C

    after reading it again, i feel that it may need at least a c-....kind of weak
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    Feb 1st, 2011 (2/1/2011 12:52am) in reply to TigerWho

    I can't hear shit.

    Edited By: norcaljeff Feb 1st, 2011 at 12:52 AM
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    Feb 1st, 2011 (2/1/2011 12:54am) in reply to norcaljeff

    well wut kinda music is it? kinda hard to hear it not knowing
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    Feb 1st, 2011 (2/1/2011 1:02am) in reply to jusfoldf1sh

    acousticish, slight country i'd say. def not "mainstream countryish" think randy rogers or wade Bowen
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    Feb 1st, 2011 (2/1/2011 1:03am) in reply to jusfoldf1sh

    It's obviously Mexican Polka.
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    Feb 1st, 2011 (2/1/2011 1:03am) in reply to TigerWho

    I like reading it as a rap, with an autotune chorus. how upset are you at that thought? lol
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    Feb 1st, 2011 (2/1/2011 1:06am) in reply to norcaljeff

    pm me with you beatboxing it and we can make it happen lol
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    Feb 1st, 2011 (2/1/2011 1:21am) in reply to TigerWho

    As someone who has been trying to figure out how to write a good song i respect anything that looks like some thought was put into it. Without hearing cant go higher than a B tho
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    Feb 1st, 2011 (2/1/2011 1:35am) in reply to famous5ives

    pretty good, lyrics show some true emotion, B+
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    Feb 1st, 2011 (2/1/2011 3:10am) in reply to rungoodmuch

    I wrote a letter and I threw it out...
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    Feb 1st, 2011 (2/1/2011 3:17am) in reply to Tim Lock

     
    Originally Posted by Tim Lock View Post

    I wrote a letter and I threw it out...


    I've always loved OT, figured it'd be a perfect place to come out

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    Feb 1st, 2011 (2/1/2011 7:45am) in reply to norcaljeff

     
    Originally Posted by norcaljeff View Post

    I can't hear shit.

    straight to hell for you sir. i still lol'd though
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    Feb 1st, 2011 (2/1/2011 8:22am) in reply to curiousgeorge

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